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what does it mean when she looks at me
a smile, a hand gesture, body language
eyes, eyes, eyes
her eyes make me cry at night
her lips make me hungry
I want to touch her
sofly gently lightly
I want to breath on her
hold her in the sky
proclaim to the world that she is mine
make her
my body, my soul, my life
understand my love
she is the one
that i hope will be
taken from everyone else
seperated from life
I am her life
take it and mold it
sofly run your hand through it's hair
my love, if that is what it is
it is hers
if she believes me
it is hers
©2006-2009 ~prelude2nr
:iconprelude2nr:

Author's Comments

I wrote this almost completely stream-of-conscience in less than a few minutes. Afterwards, as my friend and I looked through it we realized that there was rhyme and meter in it. After some line breaks and a few minor changes to wording, it worked well as a poem.

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:iconveilofmystery:
Nicely done. I'm very surprised you don't have comments on this. I'm going to check out the rest of your gallery when I get a chance. Worth it, it seems!

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We become attached to what's familiar, and sometimes we hold onto things that are safe and predictable, even if they are bad for us.
:iconsnarfer:
This is beautiful. There are a few lines which really grab me like: "her lips make me hungry"

A very sensual poem and well-written :nod:

-Elise

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Love me?

:omg: ~welovesnarferclub :omg:
:iconjenniferstarling:
I wish the "i"s were capitalized. This flows quite well, almost lyrical in a way. :)

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Current novel-in-progress.
:iconprelude2nr:
Thank you!

I don't know what to say about the "i's".
I could make up something and say that it has some deeper meaning, but it doesn't. ;p
It just didn't seem right.

Anyways, thanks for the comment!
:iconmegan-yrrbby:
It's good. I just wish the I's where proper.
But the flow was amazing hun.

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MEGAN-Yrrbby

Rawk out with your cawk out.<3
:iconprelude2nr:
Thank you, thank you!
:iconrachabelle:
It seems like a song to me, I think it's the repitition of eyes that makes it seem that way. Lovely, sensual poem.

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Make a little birdhouse in your soul...

Writing ~Rachting
Stock ~Mind-Matter
:iconprelude2nr:
Thank you.

I do tend to write to music whether I want it to be a song or not.

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